Published February 5, 2010
Hi y'all. Happy new year!!! I've never done poetry before always shied away from it but its a new year and the truth is it just came to me... I wrote this to myself at the beginning of the year so I hope you enjoy reading it.
Where you're meant to be
Stepping into the beginning,
Believing and receiving:
Living and Dreaming
Knowing that it’s coming;
Where the mourning turns into dancing
And living is a feeling
Of a new beginning...
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Hi!
This part doesn't flow quite as well with the rest of the poem, perhaps if you were to add 'then' between 'dreaming' and 'and'. Also, I believe a period should go after 'Knowing that it's coming'same problem with the flow- maybe if you were to turn 'into' to just 'to' it'd help it along more.
All in all- a good read and a great poem! Looking forward to reading more!
~Mel
It is a nice poem. What does knowing its coming mean?